Random note: from my small sample size, around 1/4-1/3 of hot girls in clubs are actually not Bay Area natives. Suggests to me that hot girls *from* SF don't go out to clubs much. I blame the hipsters :p
Haha, if she's hot, SHE AIN'T FROM SF!!! That's what I always say
I can see you're improving, helot! Good job! I admire that you continue to go out and improve.
As far as other things to work on, from seeing you in the field as well as sarging with you, you definitely need to start being more dominant and aggressive. You tend to give off that "nice guy" vibe. I'm not telling you to change and be an asshole or anything like that. NO WAY. I'm simply telling you that it's okay to develop a bit of a selfish mentality. When you see an attractive girl, approach the shit outta that. Don't care about what happens. Don't care about her friends. It's not her friends you want, it's her. Have that mentality of YOU ARE MAN. SHE IS WOMAN. YOU WANT WOMAN. Don't think about the outcome and go for it.
I remember asking a beautiful lady friend of mine, what are some of the sexiest things you notice in a man? One of the answers she gave me that really summed up all the things that make a man sexy in her eyes was, "He just has to not care." So stop being so considerate and start being aggressive and persistent without caring about the outcome.
Also, as far as passive value is concerned, start looking into fashion magazines and copy the styles of the models as best you can, from head to toe. No offense, but what you have goin on right now when you go out to clubs just isn't working. You will be surprised by this, but a BIG percentage of hooking sets successfully really comes from passive value. Women will always judge you based on appearance before you even open your mouth. I don't blame them, we all judge. It's human nature.
When you can combine good passive value with good body language, the rest of the pick up is smooth sailing.